“Rrrrrrrrrrrrrrr,” was the sound of the huge plane engine as it flew over the Pacific Ocean. I counted down the seconds until we landed at Honolulu Hawaii. Suddenly the plane stopped but when I looked out of the plane window we were moving. I stared out everyone around me but no one took any notice I decided to ask someone but then I realised everyone was busy listening to music. Abruptly the plane tipped over. I screamed and hung onto my seat for dear life but no one else were screaming. It seemed like they didn't notice anything at all! I was too frightened to speak or even scream.
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Tonya (100WC USA)
5/3/2015 04:07:02 am
Yikes! That would be a scary happening. I like how you started with action. Keep on writing!
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Mrs N Goulbourne
8/3/2015 07:46:34 pm
A great entry in this week's 100 WC. I can see you are really working hard on your writing and I like they way you have interpreted the prompt. I feel petrified just reading your work, so you have engaged and excited your reader - well done! To make your writing even better read back and edit carefully.
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Zali
9/3/2015 07:31:39 am
Well Done Hayley!
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Tom
9/3/2015 07:49:59 am
Good story.
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