One day a girl was at home. She could see something at the back of the fridge It was in a black container so as she lifted the lid that said do not open. An animal jumped out and ran down the hallway.She chased it for 8 hours and then she heard her mother's car.She ran outside and said "Don't go in there". Why?Wait did you open the box
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Miss Moore
31/5/2015 12:12:02 pm
An interesting take on this weeks prompt Connor. You've attempted to use speech, just remember to keep it up through out your writing. Your story has a good sequence to it, which helps the understanding of the reader. Perhaps you could try to describe the animal using effective vocabulary.
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