I was riding carefully through the slimy stinking sewer pipes on my galloping horse. Dodging the small rusted pipes on the floor. I heard the screaming roar of the giant slimy green sewer monster chasing me. Suddenly my horse tripped on some pipes. I fell off my horse and swam to the other side of the sewer where there was a small rusty ladder. I heard a small growl and a massive dark shadow appeared on the cracked wall next to me. With my body as stiff as a stick I slowly turned around to see an massive overweight orange cow that mooed at me!
Mrs. Peterson (Team 100WC)
12/3/2015 02:29:03 am
Andre, what an interesting scene you've created with your words. Riding through sewer pipes on a horse sounds like a desperate measure to escape! I like your choice of words "dodging", "massive dark shadow", and "cracked wall". These build your story well in the reader's mind. I think the overweight orange cow at the end gave me a surprise as much as it did the main character!
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